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Jazi Tsukiyo 2009-10-31 . chapter 7
I really like this story. Please continue it? I want to know what's going to happen next.
graciestars321 2004-05-12 . chapter 3
LOL okay, so maybe her mum isn't as alike as someone I know..I can't say I've ever fed them a tranquilizer. =D Still, this is interesting. Keep it up. ^-^
graciestars321 2004-05-12 . chapter 2
Hi. ^-^ I am enjoying this immensely so far, especially Keira's mom, because it reminds me of someone I know..Just wanted to let ya know I like it. ^-^
ONEthousandWORDs 2004-05-08 . chapter 7
Mae Govannen.
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So... the guy drove her insane? She's like her mum. Like her mother I tell you!
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It was a happy mixture of genetics, drugs, and being misused by guys. Thats it. *nods* I found the transition of ten years to be a bit cumbersome... rework it a bit, maybe? *shrugs*
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Well, this is stupendous. I'm sorry I haven't been reading lately. I've actually been living a life NOT on the internet... kinda... Well, lots of IM-ing. Not that you would care really, but... To explain why I haven't been reading. So this is stunning. All I need to to do now is catch up on the toher one sometime. *nods* Yup I do.
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May the penguins guide thee and aide thee in all thy endeavors. Ahem.
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Namarie.
TheSexGoddess 2004-04-21 . chapter 6
a great author with a great story. something i so long to attain with my posted stories. if you every stopped writing the world would truly be at a disadvantage.
Lion Rose 2004-03-14 . chapter 6
Very, very interesting. It seems that a lot must be explained about Keira's life now. I have so many questions; please explain some in the next chapter!
It is always great to do something mysterious like this, jumping into something unknown and explaining everything from the main character's perspective. However, maybe you should write from the man's perspective in the next chapter, just to help explain wait has gone on over the last 10 years of Keira's life. Either that or Keira could do her own reflection.
Whatever you do, I'll probably still like it. Love the name of the chapter!
^_^LionRose
Lion Rose 2004-03-02 . chapter 5
Okie, I'm back for the other two! It seems that after your second chapter, the plot gets a bit jolty. Are you going to explain the dream she experienced eventually? Jamie and Moonie popped up without much intoduction. This sounds mean, but it seems strange that Darren and Keira suddenly have feelings for each other; I got the impression from the first 3 chapters that she was over him and vice versa. Then again, this could just be another example of Keira's hectic/messed up life. Yes, I believe the story truly lives up to the title.
^_^LionRose
Lion Rose 2004-03-01 . chapter 3
I promise I will come back for the next 2 chapters, but so far, the story lives up to it's ironic name.
I like the fact that the character isn't perfect, and that she has many problems that plague her life, but is there such a thing as being too flawed? I like her agressive attitude, but it seems that she is constantly coming up against something negative. Maybe you're just trying to enhance the overall irony.
As well, I was wondering about part of her description. From prologue: "Her shoes were the ratty remains of three-year-old used-and-abused dog chew toys" is fine, but then only a paragraph later, she's wearing high boots. "Dog chew toys" makes me think of shoes more along the lines of ratty sneakers.
No problems owing to grammar or spelling; in fact, I like your writing style.
^_^LionRose
P.S.: You write really good reviews! Would you might critiqueing my story "Treasure"? I would really appreciate it.
Rebelious Pigtail 2003-08-14 . chapter 3
Wow! I don't know why this is in the humor section... but its pretty goddamn good! I can really relate to this girl. You explain all the motions and emotions so gracefully, keep it up, I'd love to hear more!
~R.P
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