 NRNP 2008-05-27 . chapter 1 Woah!Tthat's a first! Using :-) in a fic XD Anyways, nice lemon and plotlessness ;O in a good way 'course :) |
 Kneecap 2008-04-25 . chapter 1Oh...wow. Yeah, that was...rather explicit. In a good way of course. Erm, yeah, incredibly hot. Wish I knew someone like Micheal ;).
I'll go check your profile now... |
 erasmuss 2008-04-13 . chapter 1I guess as a lemon that wasnt too bad, though it has the potential to be better.
It's sort of seems like a purley 'get your rocks off' sorta thing, but if thats what you were ai ming for then thats pretty good.
As a writer though I can suggest that you avoid using :)'s and and/or's in youre text, and maybe try to put the writing into full pragraphs instead or pressing the enter button at the end every sentence.
I sort of feel like a tool for giving writing suggestiuons for a lemon, but it was pretty hot. ;)
Lovelove,
Erasmuss. |
 HeatherHardcore 2008-01-09 . chapter 1damn! i'm usually not one for male on male but that made me fxcking hawt! that was really good stuff. nice job! xP |
 gummybearmurder 2007-12-17 . chapter 1I certainly can't resist the pleading face. This was quite hot, yeah, but I totally liked it. :D |
 xxHAMSTER 2007-08-03 . chapter 1 oh that was NICE. m. ;P wicked hot. you rock. kudos. |
 taza 2007-04-28 . chapter 1 god i wish my boyfriend was here right now |
 Lady_Alaria 2007-04-23 . chapter 1 HOLY **! That was hot! |
 NothingInHerGlassGreyEyes 2006-12-29 . chapter 1that was hot. past experience, eh? he he he, you sound like a bundle of fun! XD Can't wait to read the rest of your stuff!
-Opti
P.S. to Hyacinthe Wing,
yes, bisexual people are awesome, even at your loss of words...! |
 cherise 2005-04-01 . chapter 1 jez! that was HOTT! next time you need to tape and sell that **, hahaha! Us, fangirls, would enjoy, I promise! haha, and you must be damn hot to get all this attention! *mumbles*gay guys have all the fun and never share!!lol, so anyway, NICE ONE!! |
 danielle 2005-03-18 . chapter 1 wowzers! hot hot hot! i like it! so this is from your own experiances? thats way cool! i think it makes it even hotter! *sigh* why do gay guy have to be so sexy? its not fair! lol |
 VampireOfDeath113 2005-01-05 . chapter 1Holy ** that was hot... And in the middle of the living room too! ^__^ It's like something out of a yaoi fangirl's dream... *Grin* Lucky you, huh? |
 Kunoichi 2004-12-02 . chapter 1 That was so hot.If that's the first time you went down on a guy, and got him to scream that loud, your a natural. |
 Satyre 2004-11-28 . chapter 1 -giggles- oh... first review at FP ever... lucky dog ^.~'
hmm, lemme see... i lurved it. very cute, sexxy, and mucho deliciouso [my spanish is bad]. -strokes chin- for the record: lucky dog.
hee-hee keep at it! may have only read about four things so far, but damn are you good. hope i can meet up with you some day [its okay, i won't try and steal you] maybe alyssa will say hi for me some time.
i am in such a good mood, a gift: -huggles- [awkward, yes?] |
 Elisabeth Turner 2004-10-09 . chapter 1:P nice. |