Woah!Tthat's a first! Using :-) in a fic XD Anyways, nice lemon and plotlessness ;O in a good way 'course :)

Oh...wow. Yeah, that was...rather explicit. In a good way of course. Erm, yeah, incredibly hot. Wish I knew someone like Micheal ;).
I'll go check your profile now...

I guess as a lemon that wasnt too bad, though it has the potential to be better.

It's sort of seems like a purley 'get your rocks off' sorta thing, but if thats what you were ai ming for then thats pretty good.

As a writer though I can suggest that you avoid using :)'s and and/or's in youre text, and maybe try to put the writing into full pragraphs instead or pressing the enter button at the end every sentence.

I sort of feel like a tool for giving writing suggestiuons for a lemon, but it was pretty hot. ;)

Lovelove,

Erasmuss.

damn! i'm usually not one for male on male but that made me fxcking hawt! that was really good stuff. nice job! xP

I certainly can't resist the pleading face. This was quite hot, yeah, but I totally liked it. :D

oh that was NICE. m. ;P wicked hot. you rock. kudos.

god i wish my boyfriend was here right now

HOLY **! That was hot!

that was hot. past experience, eh? he he he, you sound like a bundle of fun! XD Can't wait to read the rest of your stuff!

-Opti

P.S. to Hyacinthe Wing,
yes, bisexual people are awesome, even at your loss of words...!

jez! that was HOTT! next time you need to tape and sell that **, hahaha! Us, fangirls, would enjoy, I promise! haha, and you must be damn hot to get all this attention! *mumbles*gay guys have all the fun and never share!!lol, so anyway, NICE ONE!!

wowzers! hot hot hot! i like it! so this is from your own experiances? thats way cool! i think it makes it even hotter! *sigh* why do gay guy have to be so sexy? its not fair! lol

Holy ** that was hot... And in the middle of the living room too! ^__^ It's like something out of a yaoi fangirl's dream... *Grin* Lucky you, huh?

That was so hot.If that's the first time you went down on a guy, and got him to scream that loud, your a natural.

-giggles- oh... first review at FP ever... lucky dog ^.~'

hmm, lemme see... i lurved it. very cute, sexxy, and mucho deliciouso [my spanish is bad]. -strokes chin- for the record: lucky dog.

hee-hee keep at it! may have only read about four things so far, but damn are you good. hope i can meet up with you some day [its okay, i won't try and steal you] maybe alyssa will say hi for me some time.

i am in such a good mood, a gift: -huggles- [awkward, yes?]

:P nice.