WOW That was a wonderful poem. Very touching. I relate strongly with this poem. You did an awesome job. If you would could you read and review some of mine? I love hearing from other poets. Thank you. ~Kenya~

Punky Monkey had already beaten me to my criticisms , and like she said , they are tiny. Watch that spelling. this is so sad but surely a little weed cant be the end of the line for this guy. Lots of people experiment and pull back before they do something stupid.I hope this is the case.As you can see this poem touched me , maybe not in the way you meant it to ,but the definition of art is to evoke feelings.Any feelings. And you did that.
Good stuff
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when I read this I nearly cried, because this is the exact thing that is happening to the person I love, and who use to love me. I didnt want to admit that I loved him untill it was to late, and now even I cant reach him like I once could. You are very good at expressing your feelings and are a very emotional write. all you can do now is tell him things will get better and help him make it so.

wow, nice poem..I also read your story, its really good too. you have some talent and I like it. your better then me at least.



-Sises

Overall a good poem.
Just a couple of things though..
Lines 2,5,9 its 'used' not 'use'
Line 21 'comprehend' not 'comperhand'
LLine 26 'changed' not 'change'
Line 41 'he'll' not he'l.
Line 54 'poisoning' not 'poising.'
Line 56 'alive' not 'a live'
Line 59 'sence' not 'since'

Only typing errors though. Still a good poem. Feel free to find faults in my poetry!!