|Reviews for Color me Clear|
| Lina Inverse 11/17/03 . chapter 1
Unique and beautiful.
| swirlygirl 9/7/03 . chapter 1
i like this poem it says so much...
| greenfroggies 8/23/03 . chapter 1
i LOVE this!
its so...i dunno...clever.
what exactly does it mean?
thanks for the review, much appreciated!
| Keep it 100 8/15/03 . chapter 1
Great image to represent the feeling of this piece.
Heart of the Sword
| Day to Day 8/14/03 . chapter 1
Very nice-excellent cadence and and imagery. Well done!
The only bone that I have to pick is that the last two lines don't seem to fit. First you're floating along in the poem, light as air, and then a cliche is introduced. Maybe you could find a different way to end it?
I loved your word usage. Words like translucent and adversity can sometimes seeme weighty, but here they fly off the page and add to that sense of breathlessness that this poem capture so well.