Hey!

It was great as usual, short, but i totally respect you for finding time to write at all. Any chapter is better than no chapter at all. Great job! Keep it up, alright?

Wahoo! And update! I love this story *sighs* You're doing an excellent job of moving the plot forward. I'm enjoying it mucho! Keep it up! Love ya!

Nikki

you had a good tone going, kind of nervous and sad, yet determined. Nice chapter, sort of a bridge, but it served its purpose. Happy Christmas!

This is a good start, even though i just started i really look forward to reading the rest. can't wait to see what happens next.

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It's brilliant. I hope to see more!
*InSilverShadows*
P.S. New chapter of Dragon's Embrace New and Improved... please R&R.

Yup, I like this one even better! You're doing a great job. It's hard for me to tell you what my favorite story of yours is, cuz they are all good, but i would have to say this one comes pretty close to first. I like your poems too _. This is excellent! I love you!
Nikki

too lazy to sign in, but you know who I am anyway. Wanted to tell I read it. Can't think much beyond that. G'night

Ah dearie, you outdo yourself. Another terrific chapter. I'm very proud of the progress you have made. Update soon!
Nikki

I like it. You have a decent plot going so far and the characters are pretty well rounded. There were a few spelling errors, but I honestly don't remember what they were. Anyway, I like this story. Good job!

hehe, not much happened and it as a little short, but it was good, no major errors at all

You need a beta reader. They need to be good at spelling and grammar, and preferably they shouldn't be a friend. That's not to say that this is exactly typo-riddled, but there're a lot of mistakes you shouldn't be making.
As far as the story goes: not bad at all. Not excellent, either, which is why I haven't read further (that and that too much not knowing where commas go makes me cringe).

I very much like this chapter - drmamtic, and several of those bits of worldbuilding you're good at, like the "berd" thing (personally I'd have gone with "byrd," but I suppose that's a bit irrelevant). A very fast-paced chapter - can't wait to see what happens next. I'm afraid I do think you need to read things through more, though - a mistake like "incline" instead of "inclined" is something you should be picking up on.

You know i love this story! Kaylee is such a lovable character. You can't help but like and admire her. You're doing such a great job! i love when you update so do it again soon! luv ya!
Nikki

Oh, I like this. Nothing to nit-pick on with your grammar, and only one typo (followed, not fallowed. Somewhere towards the start). You're good at dialogue and describing peoples' actions - you get a nice balance between letting us know what they're doing and telling us too many insignificant details. I think more description of the city and the docks might be nice, though (how did you guess?), as you don't say enough for me to build up any kind of mental picture of their surroundings.

lol, I love Reech :D