I really liked this chapter! It was very well written and it seemed to pick up quite a bit. I loved the little dragon they found. Aw! Now all he needs is a name..._ Oh. I want Miyax and Kaylee to meet. I'm trying to remember, Miyax is a member of the Crison, right? Or am i getting my facts backward? Hehe. Neways, loved the chapter. Nice work, hope for more soon.
Nikki

I'm reveiwing. Be happy. Anyways..er...good chapter...I don't feel like finding all you errors and what-not so..yeah...bye.

You mean "Volack wouldn't stop at anything"?
and it's "the way Ahsha looked"
Please, please, please, please, please,please,please, please, please, let me be your editor! It'd be fun, like old times fer me.
So they're just runningoff eh? They'll be sorry later, what were they thinking? No Food! It's absurd! lol:D

Ek. That was short. But good. I think i like Miyax. I bet that's who Kaylee will fall in love with _
Great writing, though not much development. I can't wait for the next chapter! Update soon!
Nikki

I can wait. Good chapter, but way too short, don't rush! See ya after break (if not during)

Awesome story so far! i can't wait till the next chapter comes out, so hurry up and update...please!lol!

Star Pink

Yay! An update! I'm happy. Great chapter! It sets us up for a great adventure. I wonder what she will encounter on her way and who she will meet? Nice! Aw..that was nice of Ahsha to go with her, even though she has no idea of where they are going. I think Kaylee is going to run into more trouble on this 'safe route' than she would by just staying there. Well, i liked the chapter. There were a few spelling and grammar errors. Just watch out for them in the future, it makes for easier reading without them. Can't complain tho! I'm worse! lol! Neways...aw! I'm your favorite reviewer? *does happy dance* woo wo! hehe! Neways. Happy Turkey Day to you too! What are you gonna be doing over the holidays? Hopefully eat turkey and all the other good stuff. Well..i'm off! Ciao!

Nikki

i just have one problem with this chapter. The womb is 1. No where near the arms, so how could she have touched it when rubbing her arms? and 2. the womb is where a baby is carried. You wanted the word wound. not womb, wound. :P

Your seriously gonna have to go back and edit this story...and your other ones for that matter.

i just realised something...your the ONLY person i have EVER given consructive critism to...huh...anyways, im off to write now...people get mad when i dont update for so long...

Much better, you have no typing problems in this one. it's a little short though.

I really like this, I just recomended it to one of my friends, I hipe to see a update soon! :o) Angi

OOh. I liked this much. Poor Kaylee. That's awesome that she's going to get help, even if it is from one of the most unlikliest places. Your writing has improved since the beginning of the story. There was one or two spelling errors, nothing too big though. I like this story! When does the romance start..eh? lol! Neways, great job!

Nikki

Very nice FFuffy, keep writing!

Okay, no more saying man, its a bad habit... anyways this is a great story! I'm going to tell my friend the url of it so she can read it, I think shed like it cause it is a good story . well thats all I have to say for now and please put the next chapter up soon .!

Yay! An update. Well i quite like this chapter as well. Some of the sentences sounded forced and choppy but it was still very good. My attention wavered in the middle somewhere but i am glad that i kept reading because it picked up again. This is a very interesting story and i rather like it! I hope for another update soon.

Nikki

*gasp* That is so sad. You have a very good talent for drawing your readers into your story. Very good talent. I love how you've started this. It makes the world seem so real...like, you are just writing the story now but it is almost as if this world has always existed. I can't believe her mother died *sniff* how sad. To have to watch your entire city burn down. But why? Guess i will have to find out in later chapters!