This story has a very picturesque quality. The way you start the story with the classic fairy tale beginning is appropriate, and your descriptions of everything from the old man cutting a lock of his hair for his son to the heat of the forest is easy to imagine in my head. I'm sure your niece and nephew enjoy this. Is this a daily basis kind of thing? That's so nice of you to so that for them. Kids love princess-filled stories. Write more.

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well...*tries to keep a straight face* interesting story... and what exactly is the moral of this story may i ask? I feel rather sorry for the father. Well...good job... keep writing... *wanders off in a daze*