wow...amazing, simply amazing, i love the rythme and the rhyme, it flows stunningly well; my hats off.

--K

I love the repitition. Good poem.

it's very cool how you can see things from many points of veiw. for instance. in this, most people ( that i've read at least) would've written this in third person, but you don't. you look through his eyes. same with the cell one. it's really cool and shows alot of talent. you're definatly going on my facvorite authors list

Nice poem. It is a bit 'tragic' though. I like the ending.

ok dieng is suppossed to be dying... & why does it say watch me grieve?? doesn's he want her to do something else other than watch? But it is an excellent poem the format is way cool & teh endinhg is great! thanks for the review!

Awesome poem. Loved it and I like the rythem. Great Job.

-Seras

emotive but I feel that the verses were far too long to hold any form of rhhythm

Hey Keeper! Yet another GREAT poem. The atmoshpere you create is enchantingly enthralling...it's a beautiful poem, really. This is definitely a favorite of mine now! ^_^ It's an EXCELLENT poem! Good job!

Really good! I love your view of the moon, all the titles of the moon are really what brings out the feelings. I think my favorite title was "Evening Goddess" Keep up the good work:)

Enchanting, sad, blissful, and...HAUNTING. You mentioned you'd like comments on how to make ur work better. Just found a few typos. Dieing to dying. I think thats all - but all in all, great work.

~Siran Awel

This has to be my fav of all your stuff. It is a really good poem, the best I have ever read I think. I am totaly honest about that. I love it.