 beautiful-tigress 2005-03-25 . chapter 11OMG!! so awesome a chapter... |
 beautiful-tigress 2005-03-25 . chapter 10ok...the part where the Stone is instructing Maria to cut herself with the broken piece of shell? you say "use that broken that you were going..." you forgot to put shell in there.
then in the last part where she is wondering if she should cut herself again, you might want to say that she said that aloud to herself or something. Now it may just be me, but I was wondering what voice was talking to her, and even when I figured it out I was wondering how he would have known what she said unless she said it outlout. And that in itself is like "duh" but, I just thought it might be better if you actually had that in there. :)and I am going to attempt to write more...but I am so beyond stuck it aint funny. |
 lighthouse 2005-02-15 . chapter 10I really like your story. Update it please. |
 Dark Arrow 2005-01-20 . chapter 9Yay, you updated! This chapter was great, one of my favorite chapter too so far. I like how you describe your words too. No errors as far as I know. Keep up the good work and update soon! |
 greMlin72 2005-01-15 . chapter 8 oh finally another chappy! or have i just forgotten about this one? meh. wow, from you're first few chaps this has improved imensly. I loved the visualisation you have created.
so hurry! quick onwards to the next chapter. :D |
 Dark Arrow 2005-01-04 . chapter 8That's it? No more? Aw! I want to read more! Oh pwease update soon? Pwease? *makes puppy dog eyes* |
 Dark Arrow 2005-01-04 . chapter 7Maira is crazy. Why can't she stop yelling? If I stayed with her 24/7 I'd be deaf! |
 Dark Arrow 2005-01-04 . chapter 6I wish I had that stone. I could do whatever I want! Like close down the school! Wahoo! No more school! *looks around the room* Oh yeah, I forgot it was just my imagination. |
 Dark Arrow 2005-01-04 . chapter 5This is really good. Honestly, how did you get this idea? You would be a great author. And I'm not lying!
Reading on as usual. |
 Dark Arrow 2005-01-04 . chapter 4Hm. Weird, I am positive that voice came from the stone. Now what the heck is this stone? I'm getting confused. Well, still a good story, so reading on. |
 Dark Arrow 2005-01-04 . chapter 3Whoa! That was so cool! I don't want Maira to die, even the docter. I better read on and find out! |
 Dark Arrow 2005-01-04 . chapter 2Cool. Life gaurd boy starts to like her. Unless he's just playing around. Anyway, I like this chapter too, so I'm reading on. |
 Dark Arrow 2005-01-04 . chapter 1I'm just reviewing this because when i read a good story, I review every chapter. Anyway, this is a very good story! I really like it! I'm going to put it as one of my favorites.
Okay, reading on. |
 beautiful-tigress 2004-12-08 . chapter 8this story is driving me nuts...oh wait no its the author...hehe u never update enough and neither do i...hurry write more and i will try to do the same...:) glad to know i am still on ur favorites list after all this time. |
 Valerianna 2004-10-10 . chapter 10Hey It's mary, erin's friend.
I don't really know what to say. That was so--different. I think your writing it good. Perhaps it's a little too "in her head" to be totally the kind of thing I like, but it was really spell binding in some way. I liked the end. It seems the battle was not what it seemed.
Thanks for reading and reviewing my stories-have you finished the Seers' Truth yet?
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