I really liked it. It was quite exciting to read. I hope you continue it because there are a lot of things in the story that I don’t understand. My biggest questions are about the characters; who are they? What are their relationships? What events happened in their past? etc.

I love your style. This chapter is very intense, and I adore intense. You managed to capture it through your words very nicely (yeah, I know: "nicely" is a dull word; sorry.) and I have to tell you I was held enthralled throughout the entire thing. I saw a few places where there was afflicted alliteration, but, all in all, an excellent read. You're on my favorite authors list for certain.
Devonetta

Wow! Luv it Albs! Is it a one shot? Or a continium?

this is an amazing story. i love how it is written. i how you plan to continue this. it is so good i want more.

Hm. Very good; I think you should absolutely continue. You've got a mesmerizing style.