I didn't like it. Sounded too generic.

Sad. It's tragic how jealousy ruins friendship, isn't it? *sigh* I know it's true though. Nice poem.

nice word usage great poem

I love tanka, and reading this nevertheless enjoying. Keep on writing!

I love this. It is sad, but it describes jealousy so well. Also, great imagery as usual.

Heart of the Sword

*gasp*

there are rarely tankas, im glad you gave the effort to make one, and a deeply moving one as well.

my comment? it was beautiful and had managed to capture me by the second line. you have a way with words ) i am DEEPLY impressed, do continue on writing

Beautifully depressing. I can tell from your poetry that you are a wise person.:)

I can't find anything to critique. I love it.

A very nice tanka. You've described jealousy rather well and used some lovely lines. Anyway, keep writing.

CT

Very sad... you wrote it well, I never knew haikus could be like that... I always thought they could only be three lines! But this is still a haiku cause it still follows the pattern. Keep writing!

Can you R/R some of my stuff if you have time?

Shelila