It's good but you really really need to edit first and make sure you aren't missing words. I makes it hard to read. It's good so keep going. But please please please edit next time.

It's ok.

you know, i would help you if my FRICKIN EMAIL WAS WORKING! A*pant*AH!

all done. well, i g2g, and this is a cool story. i shall email you when my email is better.

icing :P

Awesome story, keep writing! I can't wait for more chapters! I love your style of writing.

-Ryanne Moonit

PS: i was too lazy to sign in, but if you're interested, thats my penname

don't worry ms. lady gerbil hehe i love that name...neways i'll help u if u want...i'll send u an email w/ my ideas later
DreamNightmare

I think your story is still good! so have more confidence girl! i'll try and help if i can! but greatjob, lata, Kris

plz rite more! :)
DreamNightmare

keep on going! i cant wait to see what happens!! and i cant wait to meet the person (girl?) who watches Kristen draw...

Damn, that was short, but okay, keep going, lataz, Kris. p.s. please come and check out my work

...a bit of direction would do this story good...other wise i guess its ok

eh ne ways
~Nat The Unchanging Darkness~

wow... please continue! cant wait to read more...!

A bit confusing right now so i need an update! thanks! great job though! and please come and review something of mine! thanks, lataz, Kris

plz continue...i wanna no how this is gonna turn out :)
DreamNightmare

I'll be making this chapter longer,so if your complaint is on the length,check back later.This was just to feel out if the story could even be done.