Geez... it's scared me to death. Okies, kinda cruel to be killed by...ugh a train.Hehe, however, you write a pretty good story and you might as pell make it as a prologue of a longer story. It will make out a pretty good storyline afterward. You can write astory like how the little sis eventually turn out to be a psycho, as an trauma of what she'd seen on that tragic day.
Remember psychometrer eiji? The boy had seen death of the eprson he loves and he end up beind such a scary killer.
well, just athoguht.
Keep up agood work!

AH!
Tragic! I really liked it, the description and the way the main character faced death with a smile...
but still, the ending sent a shiver down my spine...
ja ne!
i think i'll go check out your fics... even though i prefer saiyuki stuff... ^_^