OOh, another volume ends. I'm still not sure about Robin. I'm trying to see her the way you intend, but she still seemds overly touchy and bitchy most of the time. Then again, every so often she warms up to people, like Jason or Matt. I think those times are the times she is most interesting. My only main suggestions are 1) The grammar and spelling are sometimes a bit careless, probably because it was written quickly or when you were excited, but it takes away from the effect sometimes. 2) You are relying very heavily on dialogue. Not that that is necessarily a bad thing, but since the narrator is omniscient, it might be interesting to see what is going on inside the characters' heads during that dialogue (this might be particularly helpful in understanding a character like Robyn, whose words are harsh but might have complex emotion and reasoning behind them). I'm curious what happens next, as soon as I find a chunk of time I want to read part three! -Kat

Hello! I have to stop leaving reviews in a row but there are two typos here before I forget them. First, when Jason burns himself, he complains "Why did you warn me?" (instead of "didn't). Also, later it reads '"Yes" he said I derisively, like a schoolboy...'

Eh? "Because I knew you'd feed me"? I don't get it...

i came on here and saw 3 chapters and i thought u were going to end but was hoping u werent but u are. but another one!! yay! great 3 chapters and i cant wait 4 the next installment i gues u would say.

great chappie. ive been so busy. i didnt realize until just now that i hadnt been on here in like 3 or 4 days. but n e way great chappie and cant wait 4 the next one!

great chappie. keep it up!

u update really fast (not that im complaining.) ur friends did that flower thingy to u? i would ahve chased tham forever for that. n e why great chappie, cant wait 4 the next one.

lol! he he. he was covered in flowers! thats funny. great 2 chappie, keep it up!!

Yay! Write more! It just occured to me my other review might have been a little to curt, I hope it wasn't too blunt. Hmm I like Deryn a lot, though I don't know much about him yet. But whatever happened with Maryn wanting to show something to Aleyn? Did I miss something? Oh well, looking forward to your next update.

Hi! Sorry for taking so long to catch up with this one. I love your description of the monster! He sounds like something I would not want to bump into on an empty road. Hmm...Robyn has gone from constantly violent and playful to being a constantly violent, annoying feminist. I'm afraid the feminism might be slightly overdone. Even her dog is feminist. Hmm does this make me a machoist? *shrugs* I feel sorry for Jason. Oh well, reading on...

thanks for clearing up my questions. lol. i wonder what she did to rowen... update ASAP!

Oh this is really good too.
Excelent story line.

ok when i first read chapter 12 it was a chapter from le fey en soir but then i emailed by friend and told her bout it and then i got back on it wasnt there and the righ chapter was and then this chapter and... sorry if i confuzed u b/c i still am slightly confuzed. lol. n e way great chappie and cant wait 4 the next one. oh also do i need to read le fey en soir again? i noticed u were revising it. just wondering.

I've been reading the chapters of this story for awhile now, but fictionpress wouldn't let me send any reviews. I really like this story. I think that Jason and Robyn are going to get together.

ur welcome. i get on everyday and check here adn like the first 5 pages or something on fanifction.net. and this is one of my fav fav stories. yes u update very fast. not that i'm complaining... lol. n e way good chappie and pleaze update soon!!