I always liked this character from "In Circumspect", and this dark background for her really fleshes it out. It'd be nice for you to keep going with this.

Keep on Writing!

Whoa!-
That was really disturbing, and the way Melanie did that to Perfection. Whoa this was just disturbing.
Nice job!

Whoa!
Crazy chapter, and start. Perfection better watch her back. Melanie is weird.
Well done!

story was...hpw can i say this... you scare the living shit out of me. who the fuck fucks people with knives. besides this little bit of info it was great continue.

psycho bitch. did she kill the guy or did that count as the second part of the dream that wasnt true? ho hum

Well, after about a half hour of an overload on the stupid site, I can finally leave a reivew! Hmm, well, a butcher's knife, eh? How lovely. No public service announcement could preserve my sanity the way this story could continue...

Wow. Mel. is one crazy and sick bitch. That's enough to make anyone crazy and scary. you really opened up your goth closet in your head on this one.

ag! that's all i can say! agg! quite...interesting, and rather disturbing.

you always manage to get something in a story that i wouldnt figure. the sister part was definately it in this one. its great so far. she has a Wonderful vocabulary too..

aww. sadness. poor perfection. EVIL sister. I'm still trying to see how this fits with IN CIRMSPECT and evfil Matt wouldn't tell me the connection cause i forgot. Stupid memory and me! great, as always.

I love the characters in this! Actually, I never read the other thing, I was just looking at the list for "Just In". Anyway, I love how you made the family wanting a perfect young girl in it, then that young girl who's supposed to be made of "Perfection" is a total rebel... thing. Yeah. Keep writing! Of course, you've probably gotten that suggestion before!

Aye Chihuahua...Methinks I get it...How great an idea to give Perfection her own little story, this should be very enjoyable. Now all we need is to like the two stories together and I'd drop my jaw at it.