Very nice. I like it.

Wow... That was really good. I can see why you said you don't know where this came from. _

that was really good. i liked it, its good to try rhyme scheme's every once and a while...well done...

Did he die? I like poems that just suggest things instead of definitly saying them.

Hmm...fairly good rhyming scheme. I had some trouble getting the message but it does always seem harder to get it across when your trying to rhyme. Know what I mean?

Thats good, I like it. Not has much has some of your others! But it is still good. You know your getting pretty good at the poem thing. lol! j/k