I really like this . . . its wishful, although just the over all tone is slighly frail, but for the most part paints a great picture! Please review my other stuff too, I appreciate your imput!

That is a great poem!I really liked it!Keep up the good work.

By the way; thank you for reviewing my story, The Last Duchess. I read in your profile that you read Harry Potter. Well, if you also read Harry Potter-Fan Fiction, you should read my story at , Harry Potter and the Gaurdians of Hogwarts by MissHazelEyes

That's just brilliant! I loved it. Especially the 'caress my soul'. It's great.

I like the idea of water as memories, something like a river... sadly the river of my own memories seems to have a damn in it somewhere because I find it very hard to remember a lot.

Very nicely done. Brief, yet touching. -m-
p.s. minor nits—
And as the serene breeze(s)
Caress my soul,
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Consider bringing the reader back to your beginning at the end with something like—
I start to reminisce
Moments done,—
Like water's ripple,
Cannot be retrieved.

I really enjoied this poem. It gives you really cool mental immages and you have to think about it. I really liked 'And as the serene breeze
Caress my soul' It represents everything really well.
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Nice poem. Good job

i loved it. U just amaze me, u seem to be able to convey such a lot of feeling and emotions in ur poems without using so many words... I mean it makes the end result so unusual from the poetry i read usually.. This poem sorta gives a feeligns of keeping ur memories, a slight hint of sadness but still not the deep regret u see accompanying the usual reminiscing peoms.. Well done.. luv ur poetry gurl, its one to keep in mind 4 a long time

A very enchanting and soothing poem. Well done.