this is reallt good. You are very very talented. keep it up :-D

You nailed it. But who would believe that you weren't? How many lies don't keep people suspicious? Like the ridiculous ones in my sumaaries that remind readers that "it's only speculation." Yeah, right. But I'm definently glad you stopped. I liked how your mention of hypocrisy was right before how you cry everynight. All around, well done.

*Gulp* I truly care and you don't need to protect me. I've gone through alot and if you ever need someone to lean on emotionally, physically, mentally, etc. I am here. I am your friend for now and for a long time from now. I will always try to help in any way I can. But at times I'll be a stubborn jackass and do stuff that you may not like but I know is for your own good...JEEZ! I'm going on again. SO SHOOT ME! *Grin* oh well. to end this. I still care about you more than I do my own life and I MEAN IT!

"Remember, I'm stopping for you" - I'm glad to hear that. Nice poem, I really like the flow.

Bittersweet..
It sounds all rather familiar.. I liked it, because of the way it flowed and the content of the piece..
Great structure, it does help to bring the point across..
Emotion potrayal could be improved on, but all the same, to help the reader 'feel' more..
Rather painful piece, but I liked the ending..
Good job..

Keep it up

~Shadafakup

Your format, two lines each, is really well used for your purposes, driving each line, it works out nicely. WEll done.

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