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| Steppenwoelfin 2003-10-01 ch 1,  | abuseLovely portrayal of the loved one as a cold, hard, unyielding statue which is made of precious material and is full of beauty... |
| Lady B.V Rose 2003-08-27 ch 1, | abuseWow...this is one of the best poems I've read...(and I don't think I say that a lot)...So on my favourites list! - Nicole |
| CoolBeans18s 2003-08-27 ch 1, | abuseWow! This was AMAZING! The imagery was so brilliant, you could Feel the poem, and see it, and...it was amazing. Certianly one of your best!! ~ CoolBeans18s |
| glitterjewele 2003-08-24 ch 1, | abuseexcellent piece. there is most definitely a 'mythical' quality reflected in this one, it's almost like it's taking place in a different world between gods at some parts. :P the language and imagery is gorgeous, sometimes aloof but that just adds to the mythical quality of the poem overall, methinks. you did a great job creating the love-repellent guy in question. his physical descriptions really added a lot to his inner self, it seemed. nice rhythm, nice rhyme (yet again, lol). my most favoritest lines were: "your time-hewn, marble lips/impervious to my amorous glances," "my spirit will haunt you eternal," "the winds birthed your emerald soul," and "your crystal tears plunge the mists of time." also, great concept at the very end there. :) a very captivating and beautiful piece. kudos chica! |
| Keep it 100 2003-08-23 ch 1, | abuseAwesome poem with incredible imagery. This has to be one of my favorite one of your works so far. Simply superb. ~Heart of the Sword |
| The Black Rider 2003-08-23 ch 1, | abuseThis is hands down your best poem ever. It was so beautiful...I don't even know what I liked best about it. You are an extraordinary writer. Simply extraordinary. |
| obsidian katana 2003-08-23 ch 1, | abuseawesome poem! i love this. wonderfully written, great word usage and rhyming. you really have a way with words. great job! keep up the superb work! |
| Lidless Eye 2003-08-23 ch 1, | abuseThis was incredible. I loved the imagery involved, it sets such a calm picture in my mind. The wording was excellent, too, very refined. The only thing I noticed is that some of the rhyming seems a little forced to me (When I rhyme, which I haven't done in awhile, I just use one syllable words, sometimes two. Makes the rhyming feel more natural and such... Just a thought). I still loved it, though. You did an excellent job on this, write more! |