Your poem is fantstic, I hope you'd write more poems like that

We never touch
But circle, instead
In a futile dance
Always close, but far apart.
^ Awesome. Another good poem ^_^
Melanie

*In a flash of fiery dark*
*And become the unbecoming*
These lines are really poetic. You depicted a great scene with your words. Never stop writing!!

I love the whole theme of the poem. It's a beautiful thought.

sparkling! absolutely fabulous! i love every part of it

r+r some of my stuff if you want too

A remarkably entrancing and almost musical piece. You do have a way with words.

"and become / the unbecoming"... o... very very cool. i love this poem. the opposites... the hot and cold... it's beautiful.

that was deep

holy shizzow, have i mentioned how amazing you are lately?! 'burning in tandem/with your cold fire...' du bist eine genie!

great imagery. I could feel the longing and wistfullness in the words.

So bittersweet. A very lovely piece.