Good story, but I do not think the woman would refer to her boyfriend by his first name, I realize that you were trying to show that it was the guy from the first story but you could have put his first and last name, then called him by his first name through the rest of the story and the readers could figure it out. Just a suggestion, keep on keepin on.

so cool...you should really be published you know...

This is one that should got more reviews than what you got on this. It is a tight story, and it is one that builds the suspense. It is good horror and written true to its form. I am going to be reading the other two in the series but this is one that stands out for you in the sense of the way it is done.

The elaboration is slightly choppy this time around, but overall the descriptions given are good. You still have a few typos, but nothing major. You manage to paint a picture of desolation and the beginnings of despair quite effectively, the overall plot impressive and realistic. I'm looking forward to the next installment in this series!