Reviews for GETS In The Beginning

Bella Vengence 2003-09-28 ch 11,	abuselove it.
Bella Vengence 2003-09-27 ch 6,	abuseI love this story I'm not done with it yet but i'll finish it.
HoneyB 2003-08-26 ch 1,	abuseThese kids sound way to old to be only five years old. Try working on that, otherwise a fairly interesting beginning.
StaccattoToccata 2003-08-25 ch 1,	abuseWow! This was a great idea, and it's written very well! My only complaint is in the format. While your content and writing style is very impressive, I believe you are too heft with your paragraphing. It makes it rather hard to read, you may want to reconsider some of your formatting. For example: "They were all quiet and then the girl that had been on Foleros' right, spoke up. "Honey, I don't wann be the one to tell you this but your mother has gone missing. In fact, your father and little brother have gone missing as well," she said sadly. Denise was silent. She didn't know what to say or do. Could she believe this woman who she'd never met before? Denise saw the sincerity on the young girls face and knew that she wasn't lieing. Denise's eyes started to water." You see, those three paragraphs could easily be compressed into one, which would make reading much, much easier. Other than that... um... Foleros is a weird name =). I'm still reading the rest of your work. Keep writing though, this is interesting! -Choco