|Reviews for Unexpected|
| Donnatella 10/20/04 . chapter 1
Amazing. Fantastic. And I totally take back what I said about you needing to write more.
| Ahrar Nighthammer 12/9/03 . chapter 1
*Mouth hangs open*
*Finds nothing to say*
That is fantastic.
That is awesome, though.
| Loriena 8/30/03 . chapter 1
Very nice for a short story, especially for one written in first-person.
I'm sure you wouldn't mind a little constructive criticism- though you generally wrote in present tense ("like now, I'm gather herbs"), you switched to past tense a few times ("I watched its delicate hooves raising themselves and moving on the dry leaves closer.") when describing "your" actions. Otherwise, it was really well done.
By the way, though "unicorn" starts with a vowel, it's not preceded by "an," like it was written in your summary. It would be "a unicorn." (U, in this instance, sounds more like the Japanese mora "yu" than simply "u")
Despite that, good job ; )
| All Mighty Terrestrial 8/28/03 . chapter 1
Out of death comes life. Sad and interesting all at the same time. Good job.
| Shadowstorm 8/28/03 . chapter 1
wow. good story, a little on the depressing side, but i'm one to talk... lol
| child-dragon 8/27/03 . chapter 1
*tiny voice* Ek. That was definately unexpected. Abrubt, frightening, and definately different. I like it!