LOVE the format. I'd like to try that out. . .you and Ani Difranco have been my inspirations these past two days :)
I don't find it cliche. It's like a head rush.
-Jessica

It's kind of confusing and hard to follow, but it's very poetic and I like it still! Sunrise

nice breaks
the breaks really emphasis all the first words, making sure the readers take it seriously. yay for words.

I LOVE THIS! It is a wonderful poem, with which I can entirely empathize. I love the visual images you use in this and the flow is perfect.

Keep writing!

::hugs::

P.S. ~ Thank you muchly for my review :)

so moving...i completely understand. this poem was written so beautifull, i think the style reflects on the broken condition of life the poem is talking about, cutting of the sentance at its middle...definately a favorite writing form of mine.

the way you just used one word in the beginning and end really made it so much more meaningful. in the beginning it drew me in, because silence is such a captivating word (dont you think?) and the "again" at the end really left a haunting sort of feeling...it really made me think aobut the poem and the meaning

I wouldn't normally like the style, if it were your only one, but it fits very well with this poem. It gives me the impression of someone out of breath, or scared, babbling something all at once, then taking a deep breath and finishing. And that fits with what's being said. So, very nice. I especially love the first couple of lines, and the last line is really great because, even though it's only one word, it compacts everything else and makes it seem sadder.

Very powerful and moving.

well this style worked and the poem was great!

i like the one word beginning and one word ending, it's very strong.

I'm not sure what to say. All I can say is that I think this is a well done peice, and I love the word usage. The form is very rich to; begin with one word, end with one word. Eloquently done. Keep writin'

~M.R.Glass

and this try at the new style you made certainly was worth it. You suceeded. Very nice work!

ah, pain shall soon pass, but what would become of you after is still unsure ^_^

brilliant..the style agrees with your work...

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iNzaNiti

God I wish I could write poetry like you. ^_^ Awesome job. It flowed well and had a sort of bitter after-taste to it. You did excellent for a first try on this particular style. ^_^

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Canada

it's confusing just like its subject matter - which is a good thing. descriptive in its language.