|Reviews for Let The Light Within You Shine Forth|
| SquarePants SpongeBob 10/20/03 . chapter 1
this is great! and it's so true. there's a verse that goes 'let you light so shine before men that they may see your good works and glorify your father in heaven!' i cant remember the verse though.
love your poem.
it's so meaningful and touching. thanks for reminding me to be a light to others in my life and in everything i do. you've encouraged me greatly.
i like the part 'tarry not on this life' because it helps me to remember that we should build up our treasures in heaven and not on this earth.
i also liked the part ' if you choose to hide your light ... then you do a greater wrong, than a murderer does right.' this reminds me that by not sharing the gospel, it is not something small and important. in fact, it is a very large failure to us as christians.
thanks for you beautiful poem.
| Nerd Slut 10/9/03 . chapter 1
Wow, this is so awe-inspiring. I'm a Christian and I am just wowed with your poem. Wonderful! tee hee!
| Harriet I. Jefferson 9/13/03 . chapter 1
I LOVE THAT POEM! that is awesome.
I am the author who wrote Is Peace worth Fighting for? The point of my stroy is to ask, If we fight for peace, will we achive it, or will we fight for a longer amount of time?
| JazzeeT 9/7/03 . chapter 1
this is kinda like the let ur light so shine before men that they may see ur good works and glorify ur father which is in heaven verse somewhere in the new testament. unfortunately ive been hiding my lite. good poem btw
| freak of nature 9/4/03 . chapter 1
Hey - you're a talented writer, I love how you've expressed your faith thru this poem. You're an encouragement to the rest of us, thanks heaps for posting this!
God bless, x
| careless whisper 9/3/03 . chapter 1
First off, perhaps I do not make myself clear. I am very glad that the author has found God and is happy with said path. I am glad they feel inspired to write. I am not knocking the sentiment. I am trying to critique the poem. By putting this up there isn't that what the author asked for, for their poem to be reviewed. Perhaps I was too brief and harsh but I meant no harm by it. Let me rewrite my review.
I object to the fact that this sounds like most of the other poems in this section. Not that it is like most other poems in this section. I am a stickler for word choice and I enjoy poems most that use original and unique wording. This happened to sound like a poem made up of regularily use phrases. There are many ways to say one thing. Flow was good and as I said the sentiment beautiful, but I need to see beauty in the poem as well. It's not enough just to be well-meaning.
Sunflower, I'm sorry you find me annoying. But please the name-knocking is a little silly and believe me it's been done before. Perhaps my review was careless, I apologize. That is not reason to go ad hominem on me. I think it unfair that you believe I don't know a good thing when I see it.
Again my humble apologies.
| DreamerMe 9/2/03 . chapter 1
I'm proud to say that I'm a Christian Catholic, and it was like renewing my faith once again as I read your poem. Sometimes it's really hard for me to do what He asks, but this poem has really gotten me inspired! Thanks a lot!
God loves us!
| the seventh seal 9/2/03 . chapter 1
This started out bland and unoriginal, which almost made me not finish reading it, but It continually got better throughout, and turned out to be clever and creative. So I suppose I ended up liking it. R&R some of mine, thanks.
| DestroyedInside 9/2/03 . chapter 1
im trying to do the same its hard tho... doing my best... its gonna be harder this year (1st yr of high school!) but your poem really shows what we need to do! i loved it, and it was like a challenge!
| LadyGawain 9/2/03 . chapter 1
This is a beautiful poem and also very true. It is an awesome spiritual poem. keep writing!
| Sunflower Philosophy 9/2/03 . chapter 1
True, maybe it's not one-of-a-kind, but it came from your heart and that's what counts. I get so annoyed with reviewers like careless whisper. It was a careless whisper s/he uttered! Some people don't know how to see the good in things...
I think it was beautiful. Huh... my favorite lines were "It is your eyes that are blind, It is your heart that feels fear." They didn't confuse me at all. It is your heart that feels fear and therefore it's optional and not real... like in my poem "Courage".
Oh yes, I'm not Christian (I like to advertise the fact so people don't get confused), I'm Jewish, but I loved it nonetheless.
Though I do have my usual comment that remember, it's not only Christians who carry God's light...
m* Sunflower, anyone?
| BlueDragon11 9/1/03 . chapter 1
That's good...kinda reminds me what I should do...
| LaureLalaith 9/1/03 . chapter 1
HOORAH! I loved it! Keep up the good work.
| Peg Pannery 9/1/03 . chapter 1
Thank you, everyone who reviewed! It really helped with the polishing of the poem.
To Furrtil: " Your eyes are blind yet you see your light? Your heart feels fear, what about the love that your light would bring? Listen not to the words - what words? Is everyone who speaks an enemy? "
That stanza is purely Christian. Our human hearts feel fear and even when in love you feel fear. The words are from the mouths of people who would lead you astray. No, not everyone is an enemy, but even your friends can lead you astray sometimes.
careless whisper - Sorry you didn't like it!
lili brik - Thanks for reading and getting something out of my poem!
ZealWarrior - Thanks for the amazing review! That's one of my favorite lines as well.
Britt Davis - Thank you for reviewing!
Kungphoomunky - I'm glad you liked it.
| Furrtil 9/1/03 . chapter 1
Very good poem. I'm not Christian, but I believe that the message from your poem applies to everyone; although the light you speak of is faith, the light also consists of courage. Your poem would make an excellent free-verse poem, and an excellent "regular" poem, but don't try to mix the two so much in a future poem. Luckily, with this poem, it read beautifully, but I've read too many where the case is not so. I love the analogy to light. There is a stanzaa that confuses me:
It is your eyes that are blind,
It is your heart that feels fear.
Listen not to the words,
They mean nothing to you.
They are spoken from the hearts of Enemies
Your eyes are blind yet you see your light? Your heart feels fear, what about the love that your light would bring? Listen not to the words - what words? Is everyone who speaks an enemy?