Pretty good. Interesting scheme you have to the format. A little strange, but still good.

The formats wonderful, its free. A little something different never hurt anyone, in fact, I think it helps when you can get creative and explore. Perhaps you'd like to write more free verse, some of the best writing I have seen has free prose and a rhyme scheme. Tricky ey? I think that you're capable of that. Never stop writing!

Lol interesting! You always write such original stuff...good job! ~starlight~

wowie! tis cool even with the messed up format!

sh dont tell us there's no deep meaning! we'll just think you're really profoundish and our "dim" minds cant handle it. I like this one all the same

okay sweet and short, really well written...lingers like the cold air on a clear night, it does leave you with a really hanting chill..only something a brillaint writer can achieve well done.