I love the Gothic atmosphere of this poem, every word and image is perfectly chosen to create those feelings of melancholy, disillusionment, resignation, impotence, sorrow at the state of the world and the fragility and meaninglessness of life. The rhythm flows well, and I like the way you work with alliterations and assonances. Really a very good poem.

I take this remark from another reviewer, but dear Lord, english is only your second language? You coil it into such beauteous verse though...better than many who speak it as a first. ^^

That's a nice stab at a crappy life before starting all over again.

Awesome concept, I loved it! The poem was very well-written and throws out a ton of power. Excellent job on it, keep it up!

So powerful and so great.


~Heart of the Sword

powerfully written... it's such a fantastic piece! keep it up!

It is angst poem uch as this that makes me wonder...how could anyone actually write so well and yet full of sadness?

Wow, I love this kind of poetry. It was like a trip through a graveyard that left you with a tear in your eye. Great job.

WOW! This was amazing! Brilliant, wonderful - the imagery and comparsion and FEELING in this piece are amazing. Beyond words. I loved it.

~ CoolBeans18s