^_^; Finally got around to reading it!
(man, your characters have all these little "things" about them... just minor things, but they REALLY help make up your characters!)(like the ticking thing)
Very nice! ... now if only i could get to know my characters... *dies*

You have a very promising and entertaining first chapter.

The second one has got it's formatting thrown seriously out of wack, though. I can't tell who is saying what because it all got run together.

If you can fix it, I'd love getting to read the next parts.

LOL! I like this! :) Especially the last line of the 2nd chapter. :) Sounds like one of my characters. ^_~

*Raises an eyebrow* Your original characters are ~scary~... very scary... ^^; yeah...

-__-; The characters we know and love... (in their natural state! O.o; scary...)