Yeah. I always did wonder, when you look as something - what's beyond what the eye can see. This created excellent imagery!

No no no. You don't have to say you're sorry. -.-; You make me feel awful if you do. --err guilty is a better word. ;__; You are not at fault. I too had exams. V.V;

Beautiful as always. Breath taking and just gorgeous. Very simple but I like it that way. Just flowed better. ^0^ XD Great tanka. Well done !!

~* Noelle *~

That explains it. I've seen the same thing at dawn, sitting on a cold, deserted beach at Florida. You should do a sequel about a sunrise. That's my favorite thing to write poems about. This was very short but very descriptive, I liked it a lot.
-Cat

This is awesome...good tanka are few and far between, it seems, so I'm always happy to find one. I love love love the second line.

~lyv

An incredible tanka. I cannot express my love for the idea of seeing that scene. The whole thing is so descriptive, yet so simplistic...Very nice job. Write on!

Hey sweetie!

Thanks so much for your reviews. I really appreciate your opinion and kind words. You seem real nice :P I liked this tanka. Looking out over the sea muct have been so wonderful and peaceful. I know what you mean about falling though! I wouldn't like to fall in either... lol

Anyhoo, if you have MSN messenger, feel free to add me, i'd like to talk with you. najawillow@hotmail.com

:) Blessed be!

Mark xx

An excellent choice of words. You created some powerful imagery. Keep up the great work :)
*cosmo-queen*

Beautiful as always! Awesome job!!

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...Wonderful tanka!

Wow! This is beautiful! The imagery in this is amazing. You can practically see it... the sky, the ocean, fused together in the inky blacknes...

~ CoolBeans18s

Fantastic!! This is amazing! I love the concept, the story behind it is great, and the haiku was awesome!

Fantastic!

the scene is captured so brilliantly in your words... a fantastic piece!

Such an great image. I can picture that so well.


~Heart of the Sword

Wow...that must have been really scarey, being right in the middle of the water and just staring into nothing but the darkness like that. Awesome poem!