NO...! Not a PROPHESY! Ugh, it's such a underhanded plot-device, no? Totally ruins any chance for a non-cliched ending. (sighs)

Oh yeah, your sentence structure should be evaluated. There's more ways to write a sentence than just "subject>verb>d.o." etc. Parallelism is the key my dear.

the writing's nice; you might want to cut down on some of the detail, though, so you can get the story going (on the prologue, i havent read the rest, yet) ex: when you describe in the dream how everythings changing and dissappearing, dont bother will all the little things. Describe the more drastic changes that effect it all, and it would be best if you can do a short amount of that, but in an effective manner.

Cool! Nicely written, good concept. Classic.

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The Great, the Mighty, the Orc King