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| atreyu love 2008-08-16 ch 31,  | abuseLOVE the story :D and Daelan finally got together with her. how about Ronan though? will he have his own seperate story? :D |
| atreyu love 2008-08-15 ch 19, | abuseaww :( so she was taken into the sea? |
| atreyu love 2008-08-15 ch 17, | abuselove the story. and Daelan is so sweet :) |
| atreyu love 2008-08-15 ch 14, | abuseso maybe her father and mother are in the water? or maybe because they died there tahts why theyre there. |
| Carla 2008-07-22 ch 31, anon. | abuseYAY. Laralaine and Daelan for the win :D |
| Pink Ponies-cheesy but fun 2008-01-02 ch 31, | abuseI think the whole Laralaine having Daelan's baby would be a good idea. I imagine there'll be a lot of editing to do that, but I think it'll be worth it. |
| awestruck4 2007-03-17 ch 31, | abuseWow! This is an amazing story! It's so unique and original :) I luv it! However, the part where Daelen and Laralaine first met to the time where he took her to Inown seemed rushed. They had only just met and their relationship started kind of too quick. Another thing to consider improving on is grammar. Some sentences don't even make sense. Other than that, it was a beautifully crafted story! :) |
| Kelaia 2007-01-19 ch 30, | abuseVery nice story. Kept me away from my homework for almost 2 hours :) I like your style of writing, especially the descriptions. The time and place you set it in is very interesting, although I would have liked to know a bit more about it. Nice work! -Kel |
| Alenor 2006-10-03 ch 31, | abuseoh i absolutely LOVE this story. it's brilliant ~ Alenor. |
| NightBlossom 2006-08-08 ch 31, anon. | abuseThis story is very nice. Good job! |
| Fisi Mtimia 2006-06-28 ch 31, | abuseYAY IT'S DONE WHOOT! Wait a tick, is that a good thing? *walks of pondering* |
| Fisi Mtimia 2006-06-28 ch 23, | abusewoah I have tears... why am I crying over a story? |
| Fisi Mtimia 2006-06-28 ch 22, | abuse*gasps* Oh no! |
| Arialla 2006-05-14 ch 12, | abuseSince I neglected to point out errors before, I have one now: "Gently rolling waves of a clam sea, the setting sun in the distance and a family of Selkies playing on the surface of the water." I think you meant "calm" rather than "clam". The story is still amazing, though. And even the best authors make mistakes. ~ Aria |
| Arialla 2006-05-14 ch 11, | abuseThis story is amazingly incredibly fantastic. =) I noticed a few errors in the first few chapters (in the prologue, "cam" instead of "came", etc), but I don't remember most of them now because I was so engrossed with the storyline. But this story really is amazing. I just wanted to say that. And now, reading on... ~ Aria |