Nice poem, very well written.

It was a lovely poem, the construction, and the way it conveys how someone who's nitpicking will find the smallest blemish. Kinda like what American society expects...Well done! I also added a new story to my own stuff, but since my e-mail won't send to yours, here's the link:
http://w.fictionpress.com/read.php?storyid=1412910

Wow...just...wow! This is an amazing piece. The simplicity of the single (and sometimes double)word lines convey's the meaning of what you are trying to get at (at least, I hope I'm getting that right).

This poem is just great. I love the way it flows, abrupt and yet strangely woothing, it aludes to a point that can be missed if the reader isn't careful.

I don't know if this is just me, but the voice in my head that I got when reading this had a distinct British accent. Bah, maybe that's just my insanity showing...

Anyway, great poem.

Cheers.

How very cool, the structure of your poem.
How very, very cool.
Plus the poem is good.
Not going to look into it, because I know if I try, I won't find anything but frustration at myself.
Good poem.
Awesome poem.