I agree with Nemesis Wolf. It's not really that cheesy. It's actually well-written.
Great job,
Alyssha

I don't think any of the lines are cheesy. I think it's very well written! Thanks for reviewing my poems, i'm glad you liked them!

very sad & i love the way you repeat some lines... it is cheesy but life can be cheesy & the greatest cheese is he who stands alone (dont ask)

wow! this is really good. i like it alot!