i like the simplicity yet it is a more complex idea. i like reading the words and feeling as if they are beautiful words but when you think they describe something that is supposed to be horrible, brilliant!

Great metaphors. It's brillant in it's simplicity.

Good poem, nice job with the wording.

Another great one. I really like how the detail obscurly fits with what your trying to say. Its perfectly clear, yet you have to read between the lines, great job.