good why don't you keep going i would like to see what happens to him ya can't leave us hanging.

This is an interesting idea for a story and, aside from a few typos and grammar things which have mostly been covered already by Loganberry, very well written.
One thing that bothers me: winged horses are /not/ called "Pegasuses." Pegasus is the name of a famous winged horse in Greek mythology, not winged horses in general. They're just called... well... winged horses. *wink*
Another little thing: if the black stallion had wings as well, why wouldn't he chase Justin into the sky?
Aside from these few things, this is a good beginning, and I'm definitely interested in reading more.

I have one suggestiona nd that is to more clearly define what a 'morgan' horse is. Iluv ur story and i'm a sucker for horses so keep writin and it was great!

*jaw drops*
Thta was a wonderful chapter! I must say, Jill, for your first story, this was well-written, descriptive, and wonderfully breathtaking. The structure of the sentences and the mispelling of words didn't bother me as much as it did for Loganberry; I thought this was a beautiful fic!
Justin the pegasus? Any particular reason WHY you chose the name Justin? =) Boy, it would be funny if Justin the pegasus met Justin the cross-bearer! =:)
ROTFLMAO!
So, Peter knows a safe place for a pegasus? Continue! I'll be eagerly awaiting the next installment, and I hope the next chapters would be as good as the last one! =)

Right... seeing as you asked for it elsewhere, I'm going to really go for it in this review. That means lots of nit-picking, so it's important that I say before I start that I think this is a very good piece of writing overall. I don't bother with detailed critiquing of stories that are poor.

I should also say that I know very little about horses, so can't really comment on that aspect - for example, I have no idea what a "chorale" is, unless it's just an alternative spelling for "corral". Rabbits, of course, are another matter entirely! =;)

Now then... *rubs paws in anticipation*

The first sentence is a little bit of a problem, I think - it goes on just that little bit too long, with too many ideas in one "breath".

Another thing that stuck out was the following sentence:

"Even though she had foaled by him, she hated him, and would do what it took to protect her son from him."

All those "him"s look a little bit awkward, I feel - though having said that, I'm not certain what would be a better way of expressing the idea.

This being a Loganberry review, it's more or less compulsory for it to include some comments on the English. Which is good, I'm pleased to see. Really, I can only find a very few problems, all minor - for example, the following sentence:

"Tail flowing breathlessly behind him, as his muscles worked, and rippled beneath his black hide, as he went."

This doesn't make sense as it stands, but if you leave out the first "as" and the second comma, it will be fine.

Typos? Well, not many. You've got "shear" for "sheer" about 2/3 of the way through, and there are one or two missing apostrophes (eg "bringing his jaws close the others forelimbs", whcih ought to be "bringing his jaws closed on the other's forelimbs".

*grins* The names of the two animals brought a smile to my face, though - Peter Rabbit, eh? =;) And Justin is a name that'll forever be associated in my miind now with the human hero of The CrossBearer! =;)

Finally, the ending. It is rather brief, which makes me think that there's possibly more of this to come. I hope so, as I've never seen a rabbit/horse story before, and there's quite some potential here. =:)