this is your first song? its really good. i could hear a tune to go with the words in my head. you have a really good song. you should try to publish it.

Wow this is really good. I like it a lot! Good job!

Wow! I love this, I can definitely see it as one of those slow rock songs that pick up the pace halfway down. But if you have a different idea for what it would be like, I think it could be great either way. I like the fact that it makes sense, unlike those songs that have a lot of great imagery, but they just don't seem to add together. Anyway, thanks a lot for your review. I'm glad you liked the story, and to tell the truth I was thinking of continuing it, but I don't think I'll be doing that for a while. Keep writing! :)

Hey

I just wanted to say that I stumbled across this, as one does with most things... and it touched me. Reminds me of a time long ago..

Its very well written. Erm.. Thats all I wanted to say..

*waves* Later

This would sound interesting with an accoustic guitar, maybe a Spanish one. Good job.

brill.

Do you have a melody for this song? I think it'd be quite succesful. I like it... =D

There was one part in there, where you talked about chapters and climax and the whole thing being a story, and I just shuddered at that, because that's exactly what my life feels like... One big story that someone's writting. So yeah, I guess I like this a lot cause I can sorta relate.. ^_^

Very cute and well written. It's obvious that you have a very strong talent. Great job.
Nikki

I understood this song... Before the
explanation... Whoah. First time for
everything. I really liked, YEAH YOU!!
It's really like that y'know. The falling,
the rebuilding. Meh. You're just one of
the few people that 'get it'. Yeah!!

What sexual innuendos? Probably because you used the word "climax". OOh. Sexy.
Um, all in all, it's a sweet little song, nicely written, and a nice length (*nobody* gets their songs to be agood length...they're either too long by a couple of million words, or like...two words altogether).

... i like i like! ooh yup yup!! i like lots! *grimace* ... ok, that was seriously airy >.<
anyways, to a deeper level ... i really like this song because it touches something really deep and true. it's like ... when you care and then you fall and lie broken you NEED to get put back together and it's like ... argh i know i'm not saying this very well but hey you wrote it i'm sure you know how i feel =)
great job and thank you very much for the review ... *bows* ... merci, gracias, and all that junk ;)
~k8

Is it me, or is there a sense of sex over there?

I am rather surprised... usually songfic is well... just a songfic? You done a great job of writing a songfic that is more than just a songfic.

Or maybe it is just me, and my interpretation is totally off... But I really liked it.

You've done a good job here; there are no misspelled words, it flows easily, and for the most part every other line or every line rhymes. But what I did see a lack of is a lack of imagery - metaphors, the whole spiel. I suggest using imagery to keep the reader/listener's attention caught on so they will actually have to _think_ about what they're listening to. Imagery catches people's attention very well, and it allows you to go into a deeper meaning.

--The Four Horsemen

That was rather sad but I did like it though.