Are they still there?
That was cool, touching little ditty, albeit strangely familiar.

i like it..its kinda sad but its really good

*eyes glaze over*... *glomps you tightly* ... the way you wrote it.. i can tell you really care about her. it opens wounds inside of me... its buetiful... not much i can say.. i cant put into words to express to you.how it made me feel, like i was detirating from the inside out. love you sis.

Wow, that was very interesting start. (It is the beginning, right? Otherwise, your story is a little too short.) You have a unique style of writing, and it's great that you have to courage to discuss suicide.

Are the misspellings intentional? I just wasn't sure. If not, then childe should child, and vampyre should be vampire.

Would you consider reading at least the first chapter of my 'Unravel' story. I'd love to hear from you. Please? :)