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| skitbunny 2004-12-25 ch 1,  | abuseHi, I really like this one! :) http://w.fictionpress.com/~skitbunny |
| cocolori 2004-04-29 ch 1, | abuseWow...this is really beautiful. The rhythm and rhyme create such a balance in the poem that it would be peaceful even without the beautiful words. Really loved it and I don't say that about everything I read. |
| Sunflower Philosophy 2004-04-22 ch 1, | abuseI love this! Ditto on the rhyming scheme... I love "And live the dawn with me." and "strewn with stumble-stones", just fantastic use of words and imagery... Wow. m~* Sunflower, anyone? |
| Wrider 2003-12-31 ch 1, | abuseOh, very nice. I really like the theme displayed here: that no matter what we've done in the past, there's always tomorrow to start anew. I like the second line in the last stanza "Though strewn with stumble-stones". We never know what tomorrow may bring. Loved it! |
| Rhyssa Dragonlady 2003-12-30 ch 1, | abuseLovely, especially the first stanza, and "And live the dawn with me." Rhyme and structure well done, not at all annoying. Overall a nice poem. |
| RainShadow2005 2003-12-06 ch 1, | abuseThis might just be because I know you are a fur, but I very much pictured rabbits in this poem. I had this vision that a group of rabbits were on a hill, and saw the sunrise. As your poem suggested, I imagined them racing across the hills and living the dawn. This was a calming vision, and I enjoyed it. I know this is probably not where you were going with it, but that's what popped into my mind. :-) |
| Jez-Arinn 2003-11-15 ch 1, | abuseshort and sweet. that's the best way i can put it. ^_^ |
| Once in a blue moon 2003-11-12 ch 1, | abusethere's something about this poem that just strikes me. I think it may be the fact that it has a cheerful 'heart', whereas most moving poems are slightly depressive. Nice rhyme pattern. |
| VG Sherry 2003-11-07 ch 1, | abuseOO. wow, this is one of the best pieces of poetry i've read today. it's quite lovely and breath taking, and gods, i love the dawn. |
| JaphyRider 2003-10-25 ch 1, | abuseI like this one too. It's seems more like a piece of advice than a poem, which should've turned me off (I'm a hypocrite, as my "poem" escape is the same thing...I hate it though) but the way you wrote it captured my interest. Congrats. |
| I am Gone 2003-09-20 ch 1, | abuseWow this is so sweet and moving.Makes me feel all warm and fuzzy.^^ |
| Vivian Bennett 2003-09-15 ch 1, | abuseWell done, though I'd expect nothing less from such a centered soul. Filled with hope for the future and a strong sense of dependable friendshoip, dealing with anything that comes, "Though strewn with stumble-stones, Will hold no fear; no need there be to walk alone." |
| VladimirsAngel 2003-09-14 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful. Full of hope, full of joy, full of that old nostalgia that comes with walking familiar paths under the last days of the summer sun. *re-reads what she's just written* that makes no sense...but it's what your poem made me think of. Thankyou for sharing it with us! ^_^ |
| Belle the Shadow-Cat 2003-09-13 ch 1, | abuseWow. It's been awhile since you've written anything. Well i'm glad your back. Wonderful poem. I especially like this part: The trail to tomorrow, Though strewn with stumble-stones, Will hold no fear: no need there be To walk it all alone. Awsome! --Belle the Shadow-Cat |
| bunny_luver 2003-09-11 ch 1, anon. | abuseok. i've read many of your poems and they are all fantastic! it's hard to put into words how wonderful your poems are. i wish i could write like that... |