I was spittin a hot 16 bars to this poem. I like this. You should keep writing. Check out some of mine :)

Wow, this is a sad poem. Your style of writing in this work emphasizes the melecholy of it-the repitition of last words for every stanza. Once again, WOW.

Poetically Yours,

B. Rosser

wow...sorry, I'm too amazed to say anything more...

man, i remember you reading this to me! i think i need to clean up my fav. list, i want to add this! and yes, the gulick would be very proud of this. well, i can't make this a long review, homework and stuff to do! ^_~