i liked the premise of this story a lot but you could do much more with it if you expanded it. how could she have such strong feelings or Joel so soon? how could she love David that soon and how could he lover her that soon? i believe that love doenst NEED a lot of time to develop but if Jenna hated David, then theres no way that she would be able to fall in love with him so soon. if you stretched this out a bit more you could make the love believable. and why is it that vampires lose their souls when they are turned? it doenst seem like David or Joel are monsters when it comes to Jenna but Ryan and Justin didnt trust Joel once he was turned. i dont understand that. like i said i like this story, but you could expand it and do a lot more with it.

NOO! Marilyn Manson is not the devil!! I love marilyn manson music.. :(

The rest if bands mentioned... Wow, great taste *pat author's head* lol

It's KP2 for ff.net. That was cute! I just randomly decided to read this story instead of another one, but it was so good. Hope it's not too hard for Jenna to explain David... but what about Joel?

Hey I have to be honest, I have read all your completed stories, and this is the one I liked the least. I meen - it didnt feel like I 'knew' the characters, and their feelings seemed rush. Like all of a sudden she loved him. As well, the ending was a little quick. I meen then ending of the chapters. I really like the epilog, except once again the end. Im thinking- is he going to bite her? And lastly, her character is fun! Shes really caring and so, but would she really give up her life for her brother to get bit? Maybe so. But eh :) Sorry for the *hopefully constructive* critisism but I really liked all your work and expected something more ;) I dont NOT like it, it was just not your best :) =) Good job none the less.

^.^ That was great!! Wow, i've read all of the storys before this and i think you are THE GREATEST AUTHERESS IN THE WORLD! *Preasents you with award*

i have read most of your stories and i think that u are one of the best writers on this web site. and i liked this one just as much as the rest.

megan

Wow! I mean...wow! This is really really good. I enjoyed it alot. ^^;; Christ, it has me staying up till 3:30 am just so I can finish it. Very very good. Write as much as you can. You're a magnificent author!

aw short and cute...I liked it

This was an AWESOME story! But I dont want it to be over!! *tear* lol. Your a great writer! I hope u write more vampire stories!

yaye! that's so great! great job, i'm so glad she ended up with him! you should make like... a part II of their life together... that'd be awesome!!

Oh this is excelent!!
I had so much fun reading this.

There's one more chapter right? RIGHT? Please liet there be one! I love this story.

Not nice...not nice at all. I like David...

WOW...just wow! lol

oh wow... this is getting SO good!! but you CAN'T have her leave him! please tell me that in the next chapter she's going to walk off and turn around or something?!?! oh wow... great stuff!! good job!