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Reviews For: Mereath

Chaotic0ne 2006-03-20 ch 3,	abuseI think that this story has a great amount of potential... Besides a few grammatical/spelling errors, this is a very well written story. Can't wait for a fourth chapter! -[Chaotic0ne]
Genesis of Demise 2004-07-16 ch 1,	abuseWhat's, up. Well, I read chapter 1, I've got alot of positive things to say. First off, like one previous reviewer already stated, your writing style feels somewhat different, but I just can't find out what it is, but it sounds pretty good. I don't think it's the writing, I think it's more the atmosphere and mood of the story that you have to portray that shines through your writing, making it feel different. You have good descriptions, very nice flow of things, although I'm not sure what happens when the guy falls in the pond, maybe a teleport? I don't know, maybe you purposly made it mysterious as to what happend to him, sounds like the right thing to do. The first chapter is lengthy, something I like to see in chapter books, and you progress the story quick enough to finish the chapter with something engaging in the plotline, but no so fast that it feels rushed. keep it up, I'll find some time to get down to the second chapter. By the way, if you've got the time, do me a favor and check out my fantasy story: Pinnacelf: The Final Orb of Life (R-restricted). I'm new to ficiton press and I've gotten one review so far and I'm looking forward to more. See you again, and keep up the great writing.
ColorCrayons 2003-09-29 ch 3,	abusei must admit, i am slightly perplexed as to why you have single quotes instead of double around the dialogue? is that a ficpress thing or not? other than that, the first thing that i noticed was your writing style. i liked it, thought it was pretty interesting. i dont know what it was about it but it seemed different to me than a lot of other styles - mine included. thats cool. also, your dialogue seemed natural and not forced which is something i really appricicate. forced dialogue drives me insane. so you did really good on that. the only thingt i can think of maybe to fix is to give us a bit more details, but that could possibly just be me. tho i would like to see some more descriptions. ~color outside the lines~ ps if ur ever bored would u mind reviewing my story In Danger's Path? u dont gotta, just if u get bored sometime
CassSpaz 2003-09-12 ch 1,	abuseMereath reminds me of the Age of Legends in Wheel of Time. I'm intrigued to find out more about this stranger... and how Jerren got to True Mereath, and who this stranger is. It loads concepts on us and explains it quite well in only a sentence, which is brilliant. More!

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