Wow. The way you write the description is jaw-dropping! It evokes such clear images. Of course, I do have a a soft spot for Egypt, too. ^_~

awesome poem! well written, beautiful imagery, wonderfully described. nice rhyming in the first stanza as well. i like this. great job! keep on writing!
btw, cool, i just watched lord of the flies in school, and we did talk about humans being savages. ^_^

OOh, I really really like this! Poetry...the most beautiful thing in the world, yet how it taunts when we can't think of what to say! Sorry bout that lil outburst...I'm in a weird mood..anyway, this is pretty cool. Great!


~Kiara

OOh, enchanting. Awesome poem! :D

Wow...Excellent piece!

Oh, God, I love this. It's a great poem by itself, but what can I say, I'm a sucker for poetry that incorporates myth/history/legends/people who were at one point real...but I'm rambling. This is such a unique little piece, I adore it.

Awesome work.


~Heart of the Sword

i really like this. it has a mystical/mysterious feel to it. nice job!

A great poem that tells the beginning of a story. ... Very interesting.

Wow.. you never cease to amaze me.

I like this! The rhyming is excellent...and go ancient Egypt! I love the idea of this poem...it reminded me a little bit of Passover but that would be just me...:P
>winged one

MAN that was excellent! It was amazingly written, extremely entertaining, and I love it!

thats really great. I love it. Can you write a story about the kid, please?!

That was very interesting. I spent a quite a bit of time thinking about the child and what was going on in her mind. Thanks for allowing me to do that.

Wow! Creepy and mysterious! This is great!!

~ CoolBeans18s