The spirit breathes life out of him? Into ashes? That isn't very clear. Do you mean He turns to ashes? or the spirit breathes ashes? "Dead walking" to "dead, walking". Tell why when you reach you get ash, maybe?

very cool! I like it a lot

That's what I call pessimistic!
Do you actually see the world this way? I hope not.
This is a good poem. Difficult to decipher, as poetry is wont to be, but good none-the-less.
As for your review, *blushes*, thank-you! I read your bio too, and we've got a lot in common. I draw constantly. Have you ever been to elfwood.com? If you haven't, I demand that you go there. It's full of talented people...you've got to check it out! It's amazing!
Keep Writing!
~May

Justin? Nah...He always makes me happy, unless hes far away... and then I am sad... I need my Justin!

Anyway, I wrote this when I didn't get even an office in art club... I thought I was a good artist...

I sincerely hope this wasn't about you. Goodness, Ally, I know you have dramatic good days and bad days, but this is so cynical and depressed! It's very good, but I just want to know one thing: how bad should I hurt whoever *cough* Justin *cough* got you in this mood?
Katy

Some very eerie images there. I always end up reviewing these things late at night when I can't do it properly, but I like this one. Tis good stuff. More poems, I say!