Hey! Pretty nice. Maybe a bit longer though? I love your details about all the five sense. Great job!

Oh, I loved that! It's a bit angsty around the edges, but it was sad and beautiful nonetheless.

One note: Regarding the use of "Achilles’ Heel." Are people in your world accustomed with Homer? If so, I'm flattered as a Greek.

And thanks for reviewing "Under the Crimson Moon." Email will follow shortly.

PS
Did you see the illustrations I made for that story?

Wow. I definitely think you should continue this. It would be worth it.

~Addyson

that was SO good! i loved it and i wanna read more of your works...amazing imagery, i could see, taste and smell everything (figuratively of course lol)
great job :)