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| doska 2004-05-31 ch 1,  | abuseThat`s really a very good poem ! Und sehr wahr ! Dieses Gedicht ist wie ein kleines Lied und ich glaube solche Gefühle sind wohl jedem von uns nicht ganz unbekannt. Du hast den Menschen in`s Herz geaschaut. |
| Tigris-Blue 2004-04-03 ch 1, | abuseHm... this is a good poem. I like the defiance to fear, the last line takes away from it all, you could A) compleatly remove it and still have a great poem, or B) You could put something before it... like I'm dying now, and THEN put in the last line. In response to Kalna, and Kalna's family, Half of them die, and... No one likes the king... You aren't supposed to like the king... He's a nice guy though, give him a chance, If you read it later on, you'll see more of him. |
| Werecat99 2003-12-08 ch 1, | abuseI liked that even more... Perhaps it's the very personal and vulnerable feeling that enhances this poem. Once more, good work. |