This truly did have a feeling of restlessness to it ... that gentle turning in fallen autumn leaves kind of restless. I really enjoyed this. The wealth of random imagery all pooled together here is lovely.

'a cheerful, somewhat lost, breeze
blew you in from the north
hazy blue spirit'

- beautiful.

The ending stanza was gorgeous. The sudden dash of rhyme after the freer verse, and just the pleasure it gave me to read the simple words.

I'd add you to my favourites but I'm maxed out.

Damn.

I will be back ...

Another awesome poem, I wanted to read all your poems toninght... but I'm strapped for time, but I'll be sure to come back, espeshially if you post more poems up! Keep up the great work!

This sounds like an autumn poem in which autumn is chasing summer away. Very pretty!

Breathtaking. Great job again, this had a lot of potency behind it as well.

I really like the tone of this. It was somewhat magical in a way...er yea. I'm probably not making sense. Dah well. Loved the imagery. Another good piece from you.

Keep writing!

Jess 0:o)

This was excellent! The imagery was stunning, and it gave you this feeling... Brilliant.

~ CoolBeans18s

Awesome.


~Heart of the Sword

Excellent job!

awesome, you better keep em coming ;)

Excellent imagery in this one, as always. Made me nostalgic for autumn weather (it's mid-September out here and it feels like mid-July!) Anyway, I also loved the last stanza, which I felt drew the curtain nicely. Keep writing.

this is really good! one of the words that comes to mind is "clarity." i could see everything very clearly, in very clear light, and although there's definitely some room for personal interpretation, it seemed to me that even the voice of it and the meaning behind it were clear. 'twas quite refreshing, as a matter of fact. :) i loved the seconds stanza ~ it made me envision this travel-worn sailor stepping onto shore after a long voyage with a sea wind ruffling his hair. :) i loved how you described the breeze as "somewhat lost," it was the perfect touch. the last two lines of the poem had a great ring to them and wound the piece up nicely. my favorite lines from this were "restless gossiping winds," "a cheerful, somewhat lost, breeze," "hazy blue spirit," and "trysting in the farewell-sky." another great piece. you're so talented! keep up the good work. :)