Damn. Good. Bleeding.

Proverbial cigarettes rock out. Keep up the amazing work.

~Gabby

~Cracks up~ I'm sorry, but your A/N was the best part. XD Not that the poem was bad, I just found your note absolutely hilarious.

Anywho... constructive critism? Hmn. Okay. The only part of this poem that bothered me was the F-word. Thought you could do without it. But that's because I hate cursing, so no hard feelings; just my personal opinion.

Otherwise, I really enjoyed it. Clear message, though quite obviously double-sided. Interesting.

i really like this! i think every1 can relate in sum sort of way. the descriptions r good n pretty clear. very well done, keep thoughts on paper,
~misfit

I DID enjoy that poem. It's so hard to find constructive criticism. Very clever and true about how you can feel.
-kim