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| Manuel Fajar 2004-09-16 ch 1,  | abuseUniique iimpressiioons and oovertoones created iin my spiniing liitle braiin as ii read thiis iinterestiing piiece. -m- |
| True Illusion 2003-09-29 ch 1, | abuseah, so you're the shadow gal haunting our message boards! just kidding. ^_^ anyways, great poem. i like how it captures the image of standing in a large area, surrounded by people, and you seem to lose yourself in all of it. awesome job, keep it up! |
| Shadafakup 2003-09-20 ch 1, | abuseYou know, I loved this.. The words you chose, the structure and the way the poem flowed really made it sound like its spinning and melting away.. I don't know how to explain how I felt as I read the poem.. It made me read it again and again.. The words that seemed jumbled together make sense and then jumble together again.. Bah, I am not makin much sense am I.. Wonderful descriptions, and a beautiful way of puttin them altogehter at once.. The rhythm and the flow of the piece was so natural.. Nothing sounded forced or out of place.. Amazing really.. Great vocabulary, how you wove them together in such a short piece was fantastic.. Oh and did I say before, the use of short phrases really added intensity to the piece.. Awesome job.. I simply enjoyed the whole poem.. ~Shadafakup |
| Tenika D 2003-09-17 ch 1, | abuseThis is wonderful! It's definately my favorite of your's so far, besides the autumn poem. I love the second stanza the best - it really rhymed well. Nothing in the poem felt forced; it really did seem just like a top spinning around, very fast but perfectly paced. Tenika Dargan BTW, thanks so much for reviewing my poem! ^.^ |
| SaintEm0 2003-09-16 ch 1, | abuseOMG! i am your first reviewer! YAY! HA! Thats the awesomeest poeem!! HEH! I LOVE IT!! YAY! I am hyper. HEH! keep it up. Loserville |