There's no real rythem because most of the sentences are too short. It's like word. word. word. Don't get me wrong, it's really exciting, just irritating.

Very interesting so far. LOL ONLY 124 XD i feel super young XD

hey there!

loved the story. I like your usage of words. You can put together 2 words and make them sound great! Keep up the good work!

Matt

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Mosayio: Final Judgment