   Kakyou Takashiro 2004-01-23 . chapter 4interesting... twist... |
 Bunny Luna 2003-11-09 . chapter 4AAH! I. Need. More. Wrrote more CCEB!!
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 GoogleCorelli 2003-10-17 . chapter 4good.
the changing POV's were a little confusing, but got the point across. maybe make it a little clearer if you try that again?
post soon, i'll be waiting! |
| Bunny Luna 2003-10-11 . chapter 3 wow
Hard core stuff
I LOVE IT O.O
when will i see more Choco? |
| GoogleCorelli 2003-09-27 . chapter 3 hmm...interesting, keep going |
| GoogleCorelli 2003-09-21 . chapter 2 Nice description...I like the narrative, too, and you did a good job switching POV's. I'll be waiting for the next chapter! |
| Bunny Luna 2003-09-19 . chapter 1 Oh wow...I like that...its so...dark...I LIKE DARK THINGS ^^ |
| GoogleCorelli 2003-09-19 . chapter 1 sounds interesting...i like it so far! |
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